Burgeoning triumph

"Discover the highs and lows of high school life in 'Burgeoning Triumph,' a blog that paints a vivid picture of student struggles and achievements. This insightful piece takes you into a typical classroom, showcasing the contrasting realities of students: some grappling with sleep deprivation, others diligently pursuing academic goals. The blog reflects on the intense pressure to excel in Science High Schools and the often-overlooked need for self-care. Highlighting the balance between discipline and well-being, it offers a unique perspective on achieving success without compromising health. 'Burgeoning Triumph' is a thought-provoking exploration of the journey towards academic success and personal growth."

Engr. Ervin Goh

10/1/20173 min read

Take a look inside a high school classroom. You will most likely find a teacher at the front of the class and students sitting at their desks. Yet, look closer, and you might notice a familiar trend: many of these students are not paying attention. Instead, they are dozing off or even completely asleep.

These are the effects of being “panggitil”, you forget to eat, forget to bath, and forget to sleep. Ninety-nine percent of population of Science High students is unique; others will go to school early in the morning, fresh and fragrant. On the other hand, Scihigh kids will arrive at the classroom, can’t get over on the movie “Train to Busan”, because they idolize the zombies. The pressure of the legacy of the school remains and most of us wants to sustain that legacy, however, abusing your mind, yourself is more dangerous than loving someone who doesn’t love you back. Be careful, take care of yourself, and allot some time to read the cause and effect essay entitled “What a Lack of Sleep does to you”.

The author immediately snatches my attention using his simple but meaningful title. All of us can relate to the title itself, as a student. Sleepless nights are inevitable due to a heap of requirements and examinations the day after. A strong and catchy one is one of the key ingredients to a perfect taste of essay for each and every reader, as we all know that cause and effect articles are common and mostly serious, uninteresting, and boring type of literature.

He started the article by connecting with the reader straightaway. He immediately stated the effect and inserted its cause, and then discussed its successive effect. The writer’s style is a causal chain or a domino effect wherein an event causes something to happen, and that situation leads to another event, and it caused another event to happen. The style is so complicated but all ideas are correlated to each other that made the essay understandable by the readers. In addition, I’ve noticed that after applying the chain effect, he abided it by writing and organizing supporting details. He is good at placing backups for his thesis with relevant and sufficient details that were also organized. For instance, he mentioned that several sleepless nights can cause more serious mental effect, afterward; he gave scientific studies that deepen and strengthen his claims.

The cause and effect became one of the noncomplex forms of literature and considered as one of the easiest and most common among all types of essays, wherein transitions make the writer simply and easily analyze the reasons of a certain event or outcomes. For that reason, the author used appropriate transitions that blends the detail smoothly due to transitional words like because, consequently, therefore, at the same time, etc. As a result, the reader easily understood the message he wants to convey.

The body section was presented by consequently writing causes-effects, or effects then causes and a mixture of multiple causes and an effect, together with a cause and multiple effects. The readers will not be bored because it is not monotonous. On the other hand, his scientific reasons are overflowing and that made me confused if it is more of a science study articles. He started it by relating it to everyone’s situations when sleepless strikes, but as he go along, it became more science-based essay. I think it is more interesting if he will provide examples that we can picture out, experienced, or reminisce rather than take us to the things happening on our body. When he gave an example about an experiment regarding the Sweden comparing the effects of one-night sleep deprivation to mild concussions is a very interesting topic, but saying that 20% increase of neurochemical has happened is not that fascinating because not all of the reader know about it.

He centered his essays to the effects happening on our internal compositions and structures. I think the writer wants to connect the ideas from the smallest to the complex that made his essay highly organized article. He started with a catchy lead and concluded with the fusion of informing and persuading the readers.

Overall, when it comes to the essay as a whole, the strength of the main ideas and supporting ideas were established by using personal observations, related studies, and also indicated the sources of the information. There is clear evidence that one event is related to another, a chain reaction has been used. Accurate use of grammars and use of words, and choosing a trending topic especially to a student like me.

After reading the article, I realized that sleeping deprivation in exchange for high grades is unacceptable way because grades don’t matter, what really matter is having discipline on studying; however, we must not forget to take care of ourselves to achieve aspirations in life, to achieve an unblemished progress, to achieve a burgeoning triumph.